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ghost's house
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When I was a child, I always came to my grandma’s home. My grandma’s house is on the hill down, which is a small mountain, grown a lot of tree, so it looks like shady. That place have many old houses, nearly each for 100 years old, my grandma’s house also is one of those. I’m very naughty, very curious, and very like to explore as this age.

That day, I played with my friend ken, and I advance to explore the “ghost’s house”. The “ghost’s house” is the place back from my grandma’s house, only a alley could come to there, very deep in the wood, very darksome, and nobody live in here. Heard of neighbor said the house had even dead a people, and someone had been heard some strange sound from this house, so that people called the house “ghost’s house”. One time, I asked my grandma about this house, my grandma warning me “Don’t close to there! There isn’t cleanly, it’s dangerous.”

But I very interesting at it, so I and ken, decide to explore this house. We went though the alley, carefully to close the house. When we stand front by the house, we feel a little bit cool. Looked at the house, it’s very old and klunky. Broken roof with broken windows, some cirrus cover the entire wall, some sound from the toad came out around here. I bet there must live something, what I don’t know. I tried to look inside at the broken window, but there was too dark to saw anything.

When I was so exciting to looking for something, I heard my grandma yelled me. I afraid she knows I came to here, so I speedily ran back to my grandma’s house. That is the only time I explore the house.

作品作者:ii88yy - 小学生 一级
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楼层: 7
That place have many old houses...应该改成:there are many old houses...
I’m very naughty, very curious, and very like to explore as this age.... 应该是过去时
But I very interesting at it... 应该是:I was very interested...
When I was so exciting ....应该是:excited

其他小错误还很多,加油!

修改者:littletree - 小学生 一级 - 提交时间:2008-3-11 10:45:39
共 3 条答复
楼层: 8
采纳 there are many old houses 不对,“thare are”不是这么用的。

When I was so exciting  这个是过去进行式。

其他的都已经自行修改

回答者:ii88yy - 小学生 一级 - 提交时间:2008-3-11 11:42:57

楼层: 10
采纳 When I was so exciting  过去进行时不是这样的,过去进行时应该体现在 was那里,而be excited是必须这样用的,跟be interseted一样
回答者:littletree - 小学生 一级 - 提交时间:2008-3-11 15:12:44

楼层: 13
采纳 grown a lot of tree改成covered with应该好一点
I’m very naughty, very curious, and very like to explore as this age.改成At that time I’m very naughty, very curious, and very like to explore会好一点
some strange???????????
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回答者:对的是我 - 小学生 一级 - 提交时间:2008-3-11 23:48:01
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