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I think this is my first real letter, especially an English letter.
These days, we always have sunshine here. Maybe it could be say that sunshine always after the snow disaster. I think it would be the most comfortable season in Changsha.
But at the beginning of this term. I feel a little anxiety. Sometimes I can not calm down because of the failing of the final exam. When I’m looking at school report card, I don not want to cry but I want to know why. After a few days, I found the reasons of the result. The principle reason is not other thing; it's my understands of the exam at university. Our test questions are all come from the homework, but as I did at senior mid-school. I did not pay enough attention on it. I just want to catch the masterstroke of my courses, especially on math. And a not clear handwriting add to a not clear answer process brought a not well result to me. Now I’m sure the main reason is that. And didn’t take a bovine class notes is a problem, too.
Now, think back to last term. I spend too much time in classroom to study by myself. I know I didn’t mess around at there. But I can not recollect what I have done at there now. Because I didn’t have a great sense of aim, when I face a book. .I think.
This term I’ll spend much time on study all the way. But not only in self-study classroom but also at dormitory, in a travel, in a sports match.
As my father said, don’t worry. Relax. Just go forward with happy.
I think this is my first real letter, especially an English letter.
These days, we always have sunshine here. Maybe it could be say that sunshine always after the snow disaster. I think it would be the most comfortable season in Changsha.
But at the beginning of this term. I feel a little anxiety. Sometimes I can not calm down because of the failing of the final exam. When I’m looking at school report card, I don not want to cry but I want to know why. After a few days, I found the reasons of the result. The principle reason is not other thing; it's my understands of the exam at university. Our test questions are all come from the homework, but as I did at senior mid-school. I did not pay enough attention on it. I just want to catch the masterstroke of my courses, especially on math. And a not clear handwriting add to a not clear answer process brought a not well result to me. Now I’m sure the main reason is that. And didn’t take a bovine class notes is a problem, too.
Now, think back to last term. I spend too much time in classroom to study by myself. I know I didn’t mess around at there. But I can not recollect what I have done at there now. Because I didn’t have a great sense of aim, when I face a book. .I think.
This term I’ll spend much time on study all the way. But not only in self-study classroom but also at dormitory, in a travel, in a sports match.
As my father said, don’t worry. Relax. Just go forward with happy.
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Dear Uncle,This is my first letter to you, especially an English one.
Maybe it is true that sunshine always follows the snow disaster. These days, we always have sunshine here.And I think it is the most comfortable season in Changsha.
However,I felt a little anxious at the beginning of this term.Because I could not get rid of the gloominess of failing in the final exams. When I was looking at the school report card, tears filled my eyes. Instead of crying out loudly,I tried my best to know the reasons. A few days later, I found out the reasons. The basic reason is nothing but my misperception about the exams at university. To be specific,the questions were all from the homework that we had done before, but I had not paid enough attention to them,just as the way I did at senior mid-school.I took it for granted that catching the masterstroke of my courses, especially on math,would be enough.Also,I have paid the enormous price for my unclear handwriting . Now I’m glad to figure out the main reason .Last but not least,a failure to take bovine notes in class can be a problem, too.
Now, thinking back to last term, I spent much time in classroom to study by myself. And I insist that I didn’t mess around there.However, I still fail to recollect what I have done so far. Maybe it's because I didn’t have a clear goal when facing a book. .I think.
This term, I’ll spend more time on studies all the way, not only in self-study classroom but also at dormitory,or during a travel.
As my father said: Don’t worry, relax, and just move forward with a bright smile on your face!
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I think this is my first real letter...这里的i think 可去掉，更简洁Maybe it could be say that sunshine always after the snow disaster..这里it could be say 明显是有问题的，但具体怎么该不清楚
I did not pay enough attention on it...应该是pay attention to
Just go forward with happy... happy不是名词，应该是happiness
如果觉得我提的还行的话，欢迎采纳加分啊 哈哈
回答者：littletree - 小学生 一级 - 提交时间:2008-3-11 15:45:56
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我觉得Because I didn’t have a great sense of aim, when I face a book. .I think.有点问题
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great work 小桥流水!
回答者：littletree - 小学生 一级 - 提交时间:2008-3-13 11:12:03
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I admire to hear your suggestion.thank you.
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I tried my best to know the reasons改成I did my best to find out the reasons(try=do one's best虽然现在很多人这样说，但很明显的是chinglish了,要么说i tried to find out,要么说i did my best to find out)接下来的A few days later感觉着有点时间问题，应该说a few days ago你是在写信，告诉你uncle。注意前后与现在写信状态的照应
at senior mid-school应该是in senior midschool吧，lol. btw,it should be senior high school.
thinking back to last term改成 look back to这里不用动名词吧
or during a travel.怎么看怎么不顺，还是这样改even during a travel.
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Dear uncle后面有个","especially an English letter.有些重复"English one"
Maybe it could be say 应该去掉"be"(低级错误)
I think it would be the most comfortable season in Changsha 时态有问题吧
I feel a little anxiety 改成"anxious"
because of the failing of the final exam.为什么是"failing" “fail”就可以吧
it's my understands of the exam 改成"understanding"
Our test questions are all come from the homework,又一个低级错误，看出来了吗？
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thank you
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pay enough attention on it.两个错误pay attention to "it"改成"them"didn’t take a bovine class notes is a problem, too.时态问题
didn’t mess around at there 副词前不加介词at
what I have done at there now 同上
at dormitory, in a travel, in a sports match.改成in the dormitory,during a travel,in a sport match
Just go forward with happy "happiness"
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pay enough attention on it.两个错误pay attention to "it"改成"them"didn’t take a bovine class notes is a problem, too.时态问题
didn’t mess around at there 副词前不加介词at
what I have done at there now 同上
at dormitory, in a travel, in a sports match.改成in the dormitory,during a travel,in a sport match
Just go forward with happy "happiness"
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