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Dear uncle (mew)
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Dear Uncle
         It’s very nice to talk to you again. Today is Sunday (March 16, 2008), I think you and your four members happy family can have a well rest now.
         In your last e-mail last week, you give me so many suggestions. My mother said, they are filled with wise and love. I got many thoughts from it, too.
In fact, you used to talk to me about the majority of the suggestions in the letter in phone. But I could get a clear thought when I see them stay in the screen. It’s a good feeling to keep in contact with you.
         Last night, I made a call to my father. I said I can’t find the balance between high efficiency and assiduity. It is the most important problem at the button of my heart. Can you give me a standard about this? My life may be nicer if I solve the problem successfully. Maybe balance is the most difficult problem in the world.
         To tell the truth, I can’t imagine your daily life. Can you talk about it? I’m so curious about it. By the way, can you tell me your aim in career at 2008?
         Wish all of you have a happy weekend.
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In your last e-mail last week, you give me so many suggestions,这里的give应该是过去时 gave
Wish all of you have a happy weekend. 改为 Wish all of you a happy weekend.好一些
By the way, can you tell me your aim in career at 2008?  似乎不能说 at 2008,应该是in
修改者:littletree - 小学生 一级 - 提交时间:2008-3-17 15:41:38
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