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nice to hear you again.i tell you a news .i have been elected to join the english summer camp of students of nation .the activitity is be chosen to take place in da lian that is a city at seaside .there will be some teachers from china the usa and english take part in of course the winner of students of national mid-school english ability competition will be elected to join it i feel luckly to join this camp i thing that this camp can improve my english ability and this a good chance to make some good friend from nationwide .i will join to give a talk ,watch performance of students ,see sight of da lian . this is a filled with pleasure journey .
best wishes
yours truly ,li hua
nice to hear you again.i tell you a news .i have been elected to join the english summer camp of students of nation .the activitity is be chosen to take place in da lian that is a city at seaside .there will be some teachers from china the usa and english take part in of course the winner of students of national mid-school english ability competition will be elected to join it i feel luckly to join this camp i thing that this camp can improve my english ability and this a good chance to make some good friend from nationwide .i will join to give a talk ,watch performance of students ,see sight of da lian . this is a filled with pleasure journey .
best wishes
yours truly ,li hua
补充：请高手帮个忙 我要高考拉 谢谢
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news是不可数名词，所以应该说a piece of news.camp for students of different nations.
is be chosen去掉be take place是指事件本身，不能说被take place所以可以改为be held
english改为England take part in改为taking part in it.
the winner of students of national mid-school english ability competition改为the winner of the stdudents in the national mid-shcool cometition for english ability.
i thing that 打字错误I think that
this 后加is
friend后加s
see前加and sight前加the
this is a filled with pleasure journey 改为it's a journey full of pleasure.
最后记住，开头字母要大写哦。
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nice to hear you again.i tell you a news .i have been elected to join the english summer camp of students of nation .the activitity is be chosen to take place in da lian that is a city at seaside .there will be some teachers from china the usa and english take part in of course the winner of students of national mid-school english ability competition will be elected to join it i feel luckly to join this camp i thing that this camp can improve my english ability and this a good chance to make some good friend from nationwide .i will join to give a talk ,watch performance of students ,see sight of da lian . this is a filled with pleasure journey . Dear James,
Nice to hear from you again. and I'll tell you a piece of news that to my joy, i have been chosen to join in National Summer camp for students. This activity will be held in Dalian which is a seaside city. (.there will be some teachers from china the usa and english take part in of course the winner of students of national mid-school english ability competition will be elected to join it ---->I am sorry I don't understand what you say here.,..so I cannot correct it.) As far as I am concerned, joining this camp not only helps me improve my english, but also gives me a chance to make more friends nationwide. I will participate in it, giving a speech, watching the performance given by the fellow students, and enjoying the spectacular sight of Dalian. It is going to be a fantastic journey.
Best wishes.
Your truly,
Lihua
回答者：ivyfantasy - 小学生 一级 - 提交时间:2008-3-30 14:34:40
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